Doesn't It Hurts Too Much?

male:
Hey baby, darling
You have to stop this
Before it's hurts you too much
I'm not sure about this

refräng:
Oh, doesn't it hurts too much?
Or else
I think I'm gonna be afraid
Oh, dosen't it hurts too much?
Or else
I'm thinking that you have already had
Enough now

female:refräng:
Yeah, this is my paradise
The castle I'm living in
On the highest hill
That you could ever reach

male:
I'm standing here
And paint my picture
And I think that everythings okey
But so wrong I had
There's something strange with this

refräng 2*

male:
I'm going to the work without a doubt
But I have my suspicions
There's something not quite right
I don't know what it is
But I don't trust you
No more

refräng 3*

bea28

2011-06-02 18:39

Kan inte ge så mycket feedback på engelskan eller så, men jag tycker att innebörden i texten är jättefin :) Har du satt någon melodi till texten än?

Moctezuma

2011-06-03 20:06

Jag är själv ingen expert på engelska, men jag tänker ändå ge lite kritik och förslag på vad du kunde ändra, hoppas det är okej :)

Du kan inte ha S i både "does" och "hurts", så du måste skriva doesn't it hurt too much.

I'm standing here
And paint my picture
And I think that everythings okey
But so wrong I had
There's something strange with this

Om du har -ing form i första raden, så borde du kanske fortsätta…?

"I'm standing here
Painting my picture
Thinking that everything's okay
But how wrong I was
There's something strange about this"

På engelska är man rätt, dvs. man säger inte I had right utan I was right.

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