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Etikett: poesi-och-dikter
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putt3
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Åsikter på min första dikt?

Igår kännde jag mig som skit, så jag satte mig framför datorn och knåpade ihop detta.

"A smile can be deceiving.
Is he just trying to hide?
Hide what he's really feeling?
On the other side.
The other side of that smile.
Is a boy, who doesnt want to walk another mile.
With this pain he's carrying.
But he doesnt want people to start worrying.
So he wears that smile.
That deceiving smile.

A smile that hides the depression.
He doesnt want you to know.
So dont bother with the question.
"Are you okay?"
He will just play.
When his insides really are gray.
That deceiving smile will appear again.

A smile that insists.
You will never know.
On the inside he is dying.
On the inside he is crying.
When he uses that smile so deceiving."
:)

parsley
0
#1

Bra.

Nava
0
#2

Gillar den, speciellt rimmen. Skriver också många lite mer ledsamma Dikter och tycker ärligt att dom är bättre. Inte många kan skriva glada Dikter och lyckas, ber för att fler ska lära sig det men tillbaka. Gillar att du delade upp den i flera, blir så mycket lättare att läsa.

Bright light creates black shadows.

Never say never and Never say Forever